It always baffles me that people who are smart enough to get an engineering degree seem incapable of writing their own CDRs. I don’t know which companies writing CDR’s on people’s behalf are good and which one are not, but I do know a lot of them are truly awful. There used to be companies that would write pompous multi- pages Labour Market Testing reports and the like ( from a template of course) and case officers would just throw them in the bin. I’m sure there’s some good operators out there, but it’s best to do some research first. Maybe, with a bit of effort, you could even do it yourself. After all, engineers should be experts at problem solving.
I concur with Aussiesteve. I also noticed the spelling mistakes and some poor grammar, which for me is an instant turn-off.